Wednesday, June 17, 2009

Task 2e)She sat heart broken on the bed

She had tears rolling down her face.She clenched on to the locket tightly,holding it to her chest.Tears were flowing out more and more rapidly as she sat completely silent thinking back on why this had ever happened to her.
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  1. AnonymousJune 17, 2009 at 9:00 AM

    Consider varying your sentence structure.

    Instead of saying "She did xxx", start your sentences differently.

    Here's an example:

    With tears rolling down her face, she clenched the locket tightly against her chest.

    Variety is the spice of life and makes your writing less repetitive.

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